Revising and Reseeing Piece

Revision Piece, “Our Attitudes within Our Communities” Community Paper

Emily Osnes
Instructor’s Wells-Edwards and Smith
English101 OL1
26 October 2009

Our Attitudes within Our Communities (Original Version)

A person’s happiness is a reflection of their community’s happiness. When we are having a bad day we greatly affect others around us. When we are having a wonderful day it also affects the people around us. Our attitudes set the tone for the communities that we are involved in, and depending on what that tone is, it can have positive or negative results within a community.

Human kind is affected by the emotions of others. In the essay, Befriending Barbie the author tells about how Judy Stegners’ emotions affected her group of friends in the Barbie world. “They called or wrote to me everyday. They sent me money. They helped raise thousands of dollars for a tuition assistance fund in Justin’s name. They also contacted Matttel. Can you believe that?”(173) Judy Stegners’ feelings of sadness inspired her community to take positive action to make her happy. Human beings are a compassionate species that live a portion of their lives on someone else’s happiness. These people strive to make others in their community happy, and are unable to be happy unless others in their community are happy.

Community members are greatly affected by the feelings of others in their community. These feelings can sometimes come from outside sources. The community in my life that I am most involved in is my place of employment, Arby’s. The Arby’s community has a variety of ages, different opinions and people from all walks of life. The outside sources that I am speaking of are the community member’s families, and friends that are not a part of the Arby’s community. When people’s lives outside of the community are negatively disrupted it affects an individual’s attitude inside of the community. I interviewed a co-worker whom I have worked with for over two years. At work he is happy, makes lots of jokes and is a pleasure to work with. He says that when he is contacted by a negative person in his life that is outside of Arby’s he may not work as hard that day or be as friendly with the customers. If he has a family emergency he may call into work, which then in turn makes it difficult for the community to function properly, because they are missing a vital piece of their puzzle. If he receives some bad news from a source outside of the community than he will not be himself at work and others may be upset as well. His situation differs from mine. As a manager I should not let outside sources affect my attitude at work. It is my job to hold it together and have a positive attitude in my community, because I am a leader of it. My interview is not subject to these rules because of his status in the community; therefore outside sources in my interviewee’s life affect his involvement and attitude in the Arby’s community. A leader should not let outside sources affect their involvement in the community.


Emily Osnes
Instructor’s Wells-Edwards and Smith
English101 OL1
26 October 2009

Our Attitudes within Our Communities (Revised Version)

A community’s results are a reflection of the community’s happiness. Attitudes within a community affect the way that community’s function, which in turn creates positive or negative results within the community. Attitudes set the tone for the communities that we are involved in, and depending on what that tone is, depends on the ability of the community to function in society. Society relies on positive, results-oriented communities to keep moving forward in life. In a previous unit Donald Trump speaks about the community of the wealthy that he is involved in. Wall Street depends on the positive attitude of this community to keep the stock market going, just as employees at a job depend on their boss to keep spirits high at work. If a community’s attitude is negative and ill directed then they end up with occurrences of a horrible nature, such as The Holocaust.

The goals of communities are affected by human emotions. In the essay “Befriending Barbie”, the author tells about how Judy Stegners’ emotions affected her group of friends in the Barbie world. Judy tells us, “They called or wrote to me everyday. They sent me money. They helped raise thousands of dollars for a tuition assistance fund in Justin’s name. They also contacted Matttel. Can you believe that?”(173) Judy Stegners’ attitude of despair inspired her community to take positive action. The community changed there goals based on Judy’s emotions and attitude.

The emotions and attitude of individual members can create an overall shift change in the community. These feelings that affect the community can sometimes come from outside sources. The community in my life that I am most involved in is my place of employment, Arby’s. The Arby’s community has a variety of ages, different opinions and people from all walks of life. The outside sources are the community member’s families, and friends that are not a part of the Arby’s community. When people’s lives outside of the community are negatively disrupted it affects attitudes inside of the community. I interviewed a co-worker whom I have worked with for over two years. At work he is happy, makes lots of jokes and is a pleasure to work with. He says that when he is contacted by a negative person in his life that is outside of Arby’s he may not work as hard that day or be as friendly with the customers. He has a negative outside source which is affecting the community as whole, because of his vital position in this community. The role of community members is to keep the community functioning. Many communities have significant people whose attitudes have a larger impact on the community. Community leaders should not let outside sources affect their attitudes, because then the community cannot function as it is meant to. Not only leaders, but all members have this impact on the larger aspect of the community. In order to have positive results, communities need to think positively. It is the community’s job to hold together and have a positive attitude in order to produce results. Therefore outside sources in my interviewee’s life affect his community and how it functions.